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Tuesday, June 12, 2018

The Eiffel tower

Eiffel Tower
Show don’t tell
The people rushed around me like a stampede. I could taste the chocolate croissants on the tip of my tongue, the smell of deliciousness made my nose twitch with excitement.I could hear the loud honks from the vehicles, i heard a sea of voices. As I walked up the rusty bronze staircase i felt more and more scared . The wind whistled while i stood on the tip top of the tower. The Eiffel Tower is the center of france.
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1 comment:

  1. AnonymousOctober 24, 2018 at 2:15 PM

    Hi Francheska,
    Positive: I really like the detail, you're really showing no telling.
    Thoughtful: Did you know, I didn't know that the Eiffel Tower was in the middle of France.
    Helpful: Maybe go back and check your punctuation.

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